Short screenplay from the Done Deal Halloween contest.

       "The Siren"

       FADE IN


       EXT. SEA SHORE - DAY

       Calm blue skies and sea.  White foam sighs against sand and
       pebbles.  Washed-up flotsam lies scattered along the tide
       mark.  Broken planking.  Rope.  Canvas sail.

       A man lies face-down among the debris.  He wears a dark blue
       coat, white breeches and leather boots.  MONTCLAIR, 30, raises
       his head and tries to focus.

       He sees a black cliff rising above the shore.  Atop the cliff,
       a dark Gothic castle.  And walking toward him, a beautiful
       woman, MARIA, 20, in a see-through wisp of a dress that does
       nothing to conceal her perfect body.

       Montclair squints in disbelief -- then faints.

       Maria's bare feet come to stand beside him.


       INT. SLEEPING CHAMBER - DAY

       Blue sky seen through a window.  Montclair lies asleep upon
       a bed, his folded coat acting as pillow.

       He wakes up with a start.  He looks around, where is he?  He
       sits up, tests his legs, stands.  He looks out the window.

       Below the window, the cliff and the sea.

       Montclair puts on his coat and heads for the door.


       INT. CORRIDOR - DAY

       Montclair steps out.  He looks in both directions.  No one
       is there.  He walks along the corridor.


       INT. BOTTOM OF STAIRWAY - DAY

       Montclair pauses, uncertain.  He looks up, looks back, looks
       up.  He climbs the steps.


       INT. HALLWAY OUTSIDE DINING ROOM - DAY

       Montclair arrives.  He sniffs the air, and pushes the doors
       open.


       INT. DINING ROOM - DAY

       A long table with chairs at either end.  The table is set
       with food and drink -- cooked chicken, a roast joint, breads,
       cheeses, fruits, wine bottles, goblets.  Above the fireplace,
       two crossed swords on a shield.

       Montclair stares at the table and wipes drool from his lips.
       He sits and gorges himself, grabbing everything within range,
       gulping it over and washing it down with wine.


       EXT. CLIFF - DAY

       Maria walks along the cliff edge, wispy dress floating in
       the breeze.  She shields her eyes, looks out to sea as if
       expecting to see something.


       EXT. SEA SHORE - DAY

       Movement in the water as something breaks surface offshore.
       A glimpse of a forked tail.


       EXT. CLIFF - DAY

       Maria hurries along the cliff, away from the castle.


       EXT. SEA SHORE - DAY

       Something in the water swims toward shore but remains below
       the surface, unseen.


       EXT. SEA SHORE - DAY

       Maria arrives, breathless, and waits.  A black cloak lies on
       the sand at her feet.


       INT. DINING ROOM - DAY

       Montclair pauses with half a chicken in his mouth, as if
       he's heard something.


       EXT. SEA SHORE - DAY

       Maria drapes the cloak around the shoulders of a gray-haired
       man, CHRISTIAN, 60s.  He tries to kiss Maria but she turns
       her head so his lips touch her cheek.  He's disappointed.


       INT. DINING ROOM - DAY

       Montclair spits the chicken out, gets up and goes to the
       window.


       EXT. CLIFF - DAY

       Christian and Maria walk toward the castle.


       INT. DINING ROOM - DAY

       Montclair watches them, fascinated by Maria's beauty.


       EXT. CLIFF - DAY

       Perhaps sensing his attention, Christian stops and looks up.
       He smiles.  He resumes walking.  Maria looks up, worried,
       before she follows Christian.


       INT. DINING ROOM - DAY

       Montclair looks around frantically -- where can he hide?


       INT. BOTTOM OF STAIRS - DAY

       Christian's shadow glides up the stairs, bloated and
       misshapen.


       INT. DINING ROOM - DAY

       Montclair runs to the door -- but stops, sensing something
       outside.


       INT. HALLWAY OUTSIDE DINING ROOM - DAY

       Christian's shadow glides along the hallway, and is it our
       imagination or is there something inhuman, even fish-like,
       about that shadow as it stretches across the walls?


       INT. DINING ROOM - DAY

       Montclair retreats until his back is against the table.

       The doors swing open and Christian seems to glide into the
       room.  He studies the ravaged table, smiles at Montclair.

                             CHRISTIAN
                 I see Maria has been looking after
                 you.

                             MONTCLAIR
                 Who are you, sir?

                             CHRISTIAN
                 You may call me Count Aromanché.

       Montclair clicks his heels and bows.

                             MONTCLAIR
                 Capitaine Jules Montclair.  I am
                 indebted to you for your hospitality,
                 Count Aromanché.

                             CHRISTIAN
                 Please, Capitaine, sit and continue
                 eating your meal.

       Christian gestures to the chair, Montclair sits and eats.
       Christian sits at the other end of the table facing him.

       Maria hurries in, breathless.  She moves to stand behind
       Christian and places a hand on his chair.  Montclair rises.

                             CHRISTIAN
                 This is Capitaine Montclair, Maria.
                 He thanks us for our hospitality.

       Montclair bows to her.  But Maria stares at the floor and
       won't look at him.  Puzzled, Montclair sits down again.

                             CHRISTIAN
                 You were aboard the Valorous, were
                 you not?

                             MONTCLAIR
                 How do you know the name of my ship?

                             CHRISTIAN
                 I discovered the figurehead some
                 distance along the beach as I took
                 my morning constitutional.  Alas,
                 Capitaine, I fear you may be the
                 only survivor of the storm.

       Montclair eats in silence, deep in thought.

                             CHRISTIAN
                 These waters are treacherous.  Even
                 the most experienced captains have
                 underestimated the currents and the
                 weather, which can change,
                      (snaps his fingers)
                 like that!

       Montclair pushes his plate away, and sighs heavily.

                             MONTCLAIR
                 I have eaten my fill, Count.  And I
                 confess I am exhausted.  I ask you
                 to pardon my poor manners...

                             CHRISTIAN
                 Maria will take you to your chamber.
                 Sleep as long as you wish.  Eat as
                 often as you must.  The nearest town
                 lies twenty leagues from here.  There
                 is a garrison.  When you are recovered
                 from your ordeal, I shall have a
                 servant drive you there in my
                 carriage.

                             MONTCLAIR
                 Your kindness is much appreciated.

                             CHRISTIAN
                 Think nothing of it.

       Maria waits for him by the door.  Montclair bows to the Count
       and follows her out.

       The Count lifts a goblet of wine, sniffs it, and puts it
       down without drinking.  A cruel smile twists his lips.


       INT. SLEEPING CHAMBER - DAY

       Maria opens the door for Montclair who staggers inside.

                             MONTCLAIR
                 Thank you... Maria.

       She gives him a hesitant little smile and closes the door,
       leaving him alone.

       Montclair collapses face-down upon the bed.


       EXT. CASTLE - DAY

       Clouds race across the sky.  Day turns into NIGHT.


       INT. SLEEPING CHAMBER - NIGHT

       Montclair wakes with a start.  He stands up.  Something
       outside the window catches his eye.  He goes to the window
       to look.

       A light in the distance -- no, a burning flame, further along
       the cliff.


       INT. CORRIDOR - NIGHT

       Montclair tip-toes along.  No sign of anyone.


       INT. OUTER DOOR - NIGHT

       He slides the bolts, opens the door.  He unhooks a lantern
       and slips quietly outside.


       EXT. CLIFF - NIGHT

       Montclair walks toward the distant flame.


       EXT. FURTHER ALONG THE CLIFF - NIGHT

       Wood burns in an iron brazier.  A beacon in the night.

       Montclair stares into the crackling flames, remembering...


       EXT. SHIP AT SEA - NIGHT (FLASHBACK)

       Caught in a storm.  Waves crash over and the deck tilts
       wildly.  The STEERSMAN holds onto the wheel for dear life.

       Montclair joins him and grabs the wheel to steady himself.
       A wave drenches both men.  Montclair points into the night
       and shouts above the noise.

                             MONTCLAIR
                 A beacon!  Safe waters!  Steer for
                 the light!

       The beacon flame is barely visible through the storm, but
       it's there.

       The Steersman nods understanding and spins the wheel over.


       EXT. FURTHER ALONG THE CLIFF - NIGHT

       Montclair gasps in shock, remembering the DEAFENING CRUNCH
       of splitting wood, accompanied by TERRIFIED SCREAMS that
       slowly fade.

       Through the brazier's crackling flames he sees Maria, watching
       him with sympathetic eyes.

       Montclair turns and walks away.

       Maria closes her eyes and bows her head.


       EXT. CASTLE - NIGHT

       Anger fills Montclair as he stalks toward the entrance.


       EXT. CASTLE COURTYARD - NIGHT

       Montclair stops.  His lantern reveals an uneven trail of
       water and puddles that crosses the courtyard.  He follows
       the trail.  He finds a piece of seaweed.  He almost steps on
       a little crab that scuttles out the way.  The trail leads to
       a doorway.


       INT. CORRIDOR - NIGHT

       Montclair enters through the doorway, and follows the trail
       of water along the corridor.

       The trail leads up to a door, and vanishes beneath.

       Montclair takes a step back, afraid.  He doesn't want to go
       near this door.

       Yet something draws him.  He fights against his fear.  He
       slowly reaches out, pushes the door open.  The hinges creak.

       His lantern reveals steps leading down into darkness.  And
       little puddles of water.


       INT. CELLAR - NIGHT

       Montclair comes downstairs.  His lantern reveals stacks of
       barrels, crates, junk.  More water on the floor.

       There's another door.  This one has the same effect on
       Montclair, who wants to go back upstairs.  But he conquers
       his fear again, and forces himself to open this door.


       INT. STORAGE ROOM - NIGHT

       The door swings open, Montclair ducks his head and steps
       through.  The room is pitch black.  He sweeps his lantern
       around.  The room is apparently empty.

       He gasps as lantern light reveals a pair of hands, hanging
       down from above.

       Montclair lifts his lantern higher.  A body hangs upside
       down, tied to the ceiling by its ankles.  Montclair moves
       around so he can see the face.  It's the Steersman from the
       ship.  His eyes are missing.

       Montclair slowly turns around, his lantern reveals a dozen
       other bodies hanging upside down, equally ghastly.

       Horrified, he stumbles toward the door, through a curtain of
       hands that seem to reach for him and claw at his hair.


       INT. CELLAR - NIGHT

       Montclair runs to the stairs and holds onto the wall, gasping
       for breath.


       INT. DINING ROOM - DAY

       An inhuman shadow stretches across the walls.  The shadow
       shrinks, takes on the shape of a man.  Christian stands at
       the open window with his back to the room, wearing his black
       cloak.

       Montclair enters.  He puts his lantern down on the table,
       goes to the fireplace and draws both swords from the shield.
       He throws one at Christian's feet, it clatters on the
       flagstones.

                             MONTCLAIR
                 Defend yourself, sir.

       Christian turns to face him, smiling.

                             CHRISTIAN
                 You are a man of honor, I see.

                             MONTCLAIR
                 Which is more than you are.

                             CHRISTIAN
                 I was such a man once.  Before I
                 came here.

                             MONTCLAIR
                 Then pick up that sword and die like
                 the man you once were.

                             CHRISTIAN
                 Very well, I shall fight.  A host
                 must entertain his guest, after all.

       He picks up the sword, weighs it in his hand.  He takes off
       his cloak and carefully drapes it over the back of a chair.

                             MONTCLAIR
                 En garde.

       They cross swords.  Montclair attacks in fury but Christian
       parries his every stroke without effort.  Montclair draws
       back, more thoughtful.  Christian smiles, and beckons for
       him to continue.  Montclair attacks again but Christian
       parries every stroke again.

                             CHRISTIAN
                 I tire of this charade.  Another
                 ship comes.  Its crew shall provide
                 more food for our winter store.

                             MONTCLAIR
                 There is no storm tonight.

                             CHRISTIAN
                 Oh, there shall be a storm.  But you
                 will not be alive to see it.

       Christian disarms Montclair with a blindingly fast move,
       Montclair's sword spins toward the door and clatters on the
       stone.  Christian places the tip of his sword at Montclair's
       throat.

                             CHRISTIAN
                 And now, mon Capitaine, it is your
                 end.

       Montclair glances at the door.  Maria crouches low, picks up
       his fallen sword, throws it--

       --right into Montclair's hand.  He thrusts the sword through
       Christian's heart.  The blade emerges from Christian's back.

       Christian's eyes widen in shock.  He drops his sword and
       staggers away from Montclair.  He braces himself against the
       table, and stares at Maria.  She stares back, expressionless.

       He reaches for the cloak but Maria whips it away, holds it
       out of his reach.

       Her betrayal hurts Christian more than the sword in his heart.
       He coughs blood, collapses, dies.

       Montclair and Maria come together and embrace at the window.

                             MONTCLAIR
                 The fiend is dead, madamoiselle.
                 You need fear him no more.

       Lightning slashes across the night sky.  Seconds later, a
       BOOM of thunder.

                             MONTCLAIR
                 He said a storm was coming...

       Maria holds him, blissfully happy.

                             MONTCLAIR
                 He said... he was a man of honor...
                 before he came here.

       Maria wraps the cloak around Montclair's shoulders.  He's
       puzzled.

                             MONTCLAIR
                 But if he came here... and took the
                 title of Count...

       Maria snuggles against him.

                             MONTCLAIR
                 Then this must be... your chateau.
                 And you... you must be... the Countess
                 Aromanché.

       Maria kisses his neck.

                             MONTCLAIR
                 He said... food for our winter store.

       Montclair gasps as Maria anchors herself to his neck, her
       teeth drawing blood.  He tries to pull her off -- she's too
       strong.  She sucks the life from him.  Montclair's knees
       give away and he sinks to the floor.

       Maria steps back, wiping blood from her lips.

       The cloak hides Montclair as he writhes in agony, moaning
       and gasping.

       Maria watches, expressionless.

       Violent movement under the cloak, as Montclair's shape becomes
       something bloated and inhuman.

       A lightning flash reveals a ship on the horizon in full sail.

       The violent movements subside.  Whatever bloated thing lies
       beneath the cloak becomes still.  It emits WET, GASPING,
       SUCKING noises.  The cloak moves up and down in time to the
       sounds.

       Maria extends her arm, pointing to the ship.  An unspoken
       command.

       Her gaze follows SLITHERING MOVEMENT across the floor, up to
       the window--

       A glimpse of a forked tail as Montclair, or what he has
       become, disappears out the window.  A SPLASH from below.

       Maria gathers up the black cloak and folds it over her arm.


       EXT. THE SEA - NIGHT

       A forked tail flicks into view, then vanishes beneath the
       waves.

       The ship on the horizon sails on, blissfully unaware.


       INT. DINING ROOM - NIGHT

       Another flash of lightning transforms Maria's face into that
       of a scaly fish with bulbous eyes and a slack, thick-lipped
       mouth surrounded with fangs.  Then she is herself again,
       beautiful, serene.

       Maria smiles.

       FADE OUT

                                                           10/05
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